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8 Tips to Make Your Writing Sound More Formal
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Here at ProofreadingPal , we get a lot of requests to âelevate tone,â âcreate a scholarly tone,â and âincrease the formality,â and even âhelp this sound smart.â Truthfully, we cannot make you sound âsmart.â There is no substitute for good ideas, but we can (and do) help you elevate your tone and make you sound like a bona fide professional-thinking person. Here are some handy tricks that you can use yourself.
- Avoid colloquial, informal words
I see a surprisingly high number of formal academic/business works that include words that are better left for the water cooler or over a spirited discussion of the merits of Michael Bay movies. Some words to avoid are âtotallyâ (use âcompletelyâ instead), âbasicallyâ (just avoid it), âimpactâ (mostly as a verb. You shouldnât say âthat will impact meâ), âwickedâ (only use this when chatting in online games), and âcoolâ (this word can mean just about anything. Try to choose a more precise word). In general, avoid all slang words (e.g., rad, YOLO, heaps, guv). If in doubt, see if you could imagine your professor or boss using it. If not, avoid it.
- Proper use of âsuch asâ
In formal writing, never use âlike.â Itâs probably the most commonly used feature of speech today for certain populations, but avoid it in formal writing. Compare:
Animals, like bears and tigers, are interesting. Animals, such as bears and tigers, are interesting.
See how much more formal the second sounds?
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- Avoid contractions
Contractions such as âcanât,â âdidnât,â and âIâmâ are purely a product of verbal speech. We speak in contractions, but the convention is that, for formal, non-fiction writing, we shouldnât write in them. When writing a formal business letter or an academic essay, forego contractions. Itâs easy to use the Word FIND function to seek them out and destroy them.
- Avoid clichés
Common Formality Mistakes
This guide wouldnât be complete without a look at some common practices that people use to make their writing more formal that donât work. Here are a few practices we end up having to correct time and time again.
5. Don’t use passive voice . Passive voice is wordy, but being formal has nothing to do with wordiness.
- Donât use thesaurus words you donât fully understand. Big words donât make your writing sound more formal, and this can backfire when you pick a word that doesnât mean what you think it means. Take the sentence, âI saw a red dog walking down the street.â Easy, right? But using too much of a thesaurus might cause you to create: âI consulted a bloodshot mongrel marching down the highway,â which clearly is not what you intended.
- Donât be wordy.
In all writing, wherever possible, brevity is the soul of wit. (Even I canât avoid clichĂ©s, but at least thatâs Shakespeare.) That means, always keep your prose as simple as possible . You may think, âThe item that we are discussing could be the solution we are looking for to solve our problem,â sounds better because itâs long, but itâll just annoy your reader. âThat is the solution to our problem,â is better.
- Donât mangle your sentences with third person.
Some professors still insist their students use third person to make their writing sound more formal, but (and always check with your professor first) style guides such as APA (and us) recommend you use first or second person to prevent passive voice and ambiguous language. Take: âThe researcher applied a qualitative approach to the studyâ for example. Who is the researcher? You or someone else? This is ambiguous. Itâs better to say, âI will take a qualitative approach to the study,â and this doesnât sound any less formal.
Happy writing, and good luck.
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- Every component of a successful piece of writing should express only one idea.
- In persuasive writing, your “one idea” is often the argument or belief you are presenting to the reader. Once you identify what that argument is, the “one-idea rule” can help you develop, revise, and connect the various components of your writing.
- For instance, let’s say you’re writing an essay. There are three components you will be working with throughout your piece: the title, the paragraphs, and the sentences.
- Each of these parts should be dedicated to just one idea. The ideas are not identical, of course, but they’re all related. If done correctly, the smaller ideas (in sentences) all build (in paragraphs) to support the main point (suggested in the title).
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1. Use ACTIVE VOICE
Don't say:Â "The stepmother's house was cleaned by Cinderella."Â (Passive.)
Say instead:Â "Cinderella cleaned the stepmother's house." Â (Active voice.)
Passive voice construction ("was cleaned") is reserved for those occasions where the "do-er" of the action is unknown.
Example:Â "Prince Charming saw the glass slipper that was left behind."
2. Mix it up in terms of PUNCTUATION
Here are a few commonly misused punctuation marks that a lot of people aren't sure about:
The semi-colon (;)  separates two complete sentences that are complementary.
Example:Â "She was always covered in cinders from cleaning the fireplace; they called her Cinderella."
The  colon (:)  is used...
a. preceding a list.
Example:Â "Before her stepmother awoke, Cinderella had three chores to complete: feeding the chickens, cooking breakfast, and doing the wash." âš
b. as a sort of "drum roll," preceding some big revelation.
Example:Â "One thing fueled the wicked stepmother's hatred for Cinderella: jealousy." Â âš
The dash (--)  is made by typing two hyphens (-). No spaces go in between the dash and the text. It is used...
a. to bracket off some explanatory information.
Example:Â "Even Cinderella's stepsisters-who were not nearly as lovely or virtuous as Cinderella--were allowed to go to the ball." âš
b. in the "drum roll" sense of the colon.
Example:Â "Prince Charming would find this mystery lady--even if he had to put the slipper on every other girl in the kingdom."Â âš
3. Vary your SENTENCE STRUCTURE
Don't say:Â "Cinderella saw her fairy godmother appear. She was dressed in blue. She held a wand. The wand had a star on it. She was covered in sparkles. Cinderella was amazed. She asked who the woman was. The woman said, 'I am your fairy godmother.' She said she would get Cinderella a dress and a coach. She said she would help Cinderella go to the ball."
Instead say: (there are multiple correct ways to rewrite this, but here's one)Â "Amazed, Cinderella watched as her fairy godmother appeared. The woman dressed in blue was covered in sparkles and carried a star-shaped wand. Cinderella asked the woman who she was, to which the woman replied, 'I am your fairy godmother." The fairy godmother would get Cinderella a dress and a coach; she would help Cinderella get to the ball."
4. Closely related to this, avoid CHOPPINESS
Don't say:Â "She scrubbed the floors. They were dirty. She used a mop. She sighed sadly. It was as if she were a servant ."
Instead say : (again, there are multiple ways to do this)Â "She scrubbed the dirty floors using a mop, as if she were a servant. She sighed sadly."
5. Avoid REPETITION.
Don't say:Â "The stepsisters were jealous and envious ."
Instead say :Â "The stepsisters were jealous ." Â (...or envious. Pick one.)
6. Be CONCISE
Don't say:Â "The mystery lady was one who every eligible man at the ball admired."
Instead say :Â "Every eligible man at the ball admired the mystery lady."
7. Use the VOCABULARY that you know.
Don't always feel you have to use big words. It is always better to be clear and use simple language rather than showing off flashy words you aren't sure about and potentially misusing them. This is not to say, however, that you should settle for very weak vocabulary choices (like "bad" or "big" or "mad").
8. But also work on expanding your VOCABULARY.
When reading, look up words you don't know. See how they're used. Start a list. Incorporate them into your writing as you feel comfortable and as they are appropriate.
9. Keep language FORMAL and avoid language of everyday speech.
Don't say:Â "Cinderella was mellow and good. She never let her stepmother get to her ."
Say instead:Â "Cinderella was mild-mannered and kind. She never let her stepmother affect her high spirits ."
So, essentially, when it comes to working on style, there are three things to remember:
Empower yourself with knowledge..
Learn to punctuate correctly, enhance your vocabulary, etc. Give yourself all the tools there are so that you are free to...
...Mix it up!
Avoid repetition of words and sentence structure. Variance promotes good "flow" and is more interesting for your reader.
"Write to EXPRESS, not to IMPRESS."
Above all, write actively, clearly, and concisely.
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How To Write an Academic Essay? 9 Amazing Tips
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A regular question by our subscribers, so we’re here to answer ‘how to write an academic essay’?
In order to write a good academic essay and thesis, you must use appropriate language and concise words (and make sure there is plenty of proofreading and editing!).
It can be hard to ensure your essay follows proper conventions so we have compiled a list of things to do and things to avoid to make your essay sound more academic.
Remember before reading this, that you should be planning your essay, and important things to remember include: thesis and introduction, a well-structured body of text, research, and more.
These 9 important pieces of advice will help you be the author of a great academic paper.
1. Avoid Contractions
One question I always get, is should I use contractions? A contraction is a combination of words that have been shortened by either fusing the two words together or the omission of syllables from the two words.
For example, the words:
- aren’t
- don’t
- can’t
are all contractions.
Contractions are the enemy of a formal academic essay. Use them in your everyday conversation, but it is important to leave them out of your essay.
2. Avoid Clichés
ClichĂ©s are overused phrases or expressions such as âback to square oneâ, or âtoo good to be trueâ.
You can find hundreds of clichés and you should avoid them at all costs, as you do not need them.
Clichés are not always obvious, so you have to be thorough in your proofreading to ensure that no clichés have made their way into your academic essay.
In essence, avoid using flowery language and make sure you go through the process of knowing that your reader knows what you mean by writing plainly and clearly in your essay.
Advice: Write for the reader!
3. Avoid Colloquialisms and Informal Vocab
Your essay should steer clear of any colloquialisms or informal words, which will make it flow better for the reader. When writing essays be sure to avoid words that you use in everyday conversation such as, totally, basically, super and heaps.
Another important writing process is that you should never use slang or abbreviations in your academic essay. This is especially important when setting the tone in your thesis.
4. Use Academic Vocabulary
Ensure that you use academic vocabulary in your essay to strengthen your argument. Avoid words such as think, use and lots as these sound less academic. If you’re looking for more ways on writing better then our ‘ how to improve your writing ‘ may be of interest to you.
Use descriptive words to help your reader understand key points in your statements, introductions, body and conclusion.
When writing an academic essay, there is important to use academic words throughout the paper. By writing answers to the paper questions with a well-thought-out structure and use of academic vocab, then you’ll be well on your way to pleasing the reader of your paper.
5. Make Your Thesis or Argument Obvious
When writing an academic essay, one of the most important things is to ensure that your argument is clear, obvious and is clearly stated in plain language.
Use strong wording in your thesis or argument to persuade your reader. You can help this by using a careful structure in your essay plan, as well as writing clear coherent paragraphs and sections.
Your thesis statement should be in your introduction paragraph and reviewed in the proofreading process to ensure you have answered the question.
6. Ensure You Are Using the Right Point of View
The point of view in your paper depends on the type of essay you are writing and the task requirements. Always ensure that you are writing from the correct point of view when writing your essay.
Academic essays will either be written in the third person or first person. You should never write an essay in the second person.
7. Use Topic Sentences and Transitions
Each paragraph of your paper should begin with a topic sentence. A topic sentence introduces the main concept or idea of a paragraph.
Similar to topic sentences, transition sentences make your paper flow from one idea to another within a paragraph. Having these smooth transitions make your academic essay clearer and easier to read.
For instance, when editing your thesis you should make sure there is a topic sentence.
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8. Ensure Your Document is Properly Formatted
The way that your document should be formatted depends on the kind of essay you are writing. Be sure to check with your teacher about the formatting requirements for your essay.
As a standard formatting guide, you should always use a 12-point serif typeface and have a line spacing of 2.0.
Moreover, make sure you are proofread and go through the process of continually editing your essay. By making sure that your papers have coherent introductions (or thesis), a well-structured body, and a conclusion, as well as always answering the essay question, you’ll be well on your way to writing an academic essay.
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9. Make Sure You Are Using the Proper Referencing Guide
There are a number of academic referencing styles available for an essay. The academic referencing style you should use will depend on the type of essay you are writing, or the preference of the person marking it.
Be sure that you are using the correct referencing style as this will contribute to your essay looking and sounding more academic.
Finally, please remember…
Proofreading and editing are some of the most important parts to ensure that you have answered the question and satisfied the readers’ attention. By proofreading and editing multiple times, and even employing proofreading services (thanks Mum and Dad!), will lead to your essay sounding and reading in a more academic tone.
Each section should undergo meticulous proofreading, to ensure the correct words, advice, research, dates, and citations are used.
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Have you ever read a report, article, or book, and wished that your writing sounded as good? All writers feel as though what they write is not nearly as good as works written by someone else. However, a few stylistic aspects set the great writers apart from the amateurs.
The stylistic aspects we are talking about are easy to learn. It is just learning alternatives to the way you may write now. Who knows what makes these styles sophisticated over any other way of writing; but in today's world, they are considered the better, more sophisticated way of writing, so it only benefits you to use them.
The first stylistic aspect of your writing that will make it sound more sophisticated is in your sentence structure. Two common structures that are attributed to amateur writers are in examples listed below:
Running to the store, she tripped and fell over a rock.
As she ran to the store, she tripped and fell over a rock.
Both the "as" and the "ing" construction are grammatically correct; however, they are constructions that are known to be used by newer, less experienced writers. The problem with using these is that they are lazy. Although they show action, they can be a shortcut used by the writer to show action as quickly and easily as possible, or they can be an unneeded distraction from the action that is taking place. Either way, they weaken your writing.
Use an alternative to these constructions, such as:
She tripped and fell over a rock on her way to the store.
Since "tripped" and "fell" are the verbs in this sentence, it is important to construct the sentence to show this. "On her way to the store" is simply what she was doing when she tripped and fell. It is not the action.
Another way to avoid looking like an amateur is to avoid using clichés. Clichés are expressions that are commonly used when speaking. For example: "Living life in the fast lane," or "not being worth a plugged nickel" are both worn-out clichés. They are used so often, they no longer mean anything when you use them in your writing. They are not adequate descriptions, and they do not show your readers anything except that you do not know how to be original.
Beware of other clichés that are not only over-used, they do not make any sense anyway. Editors and publishers particularly get tired of expressions such as "she tossed her head." When is the last time you saw anyone toss his or her head? How far did they toss it? While this may sound good to you as the writer, and you may think you are being clever, your descriptions should never rely on clichés or figures of speech that describe an impossible action.
Do not create clichéd characters, either. The computer geek with the pocket protector is a stereotype. He is clichéd. The characters that you create are individuals . Do not follow stereotypes or clichés when you create them. Instead, make them three-dimensional beings that are believable and unique. If you resort to using stereotypes and clichés, your characters will seem more like cartoon characters or bad parodies that are uninteresting and unbelievable. Nothing will turn your reader off more quickly than that.
There are so many clichés in the English language that it is impossible never to use one. You may find yourself in a position where you need to use a cliché to adequately describe a situation. However, before you just type out the cliché, try altering it a bit. Make it less familiar to the reader and tailor it to the situation you need it for. Look at the example below.
The fog was thicker than pea soup that night.
The fog was thicker than watered-down pea soup that night.
When we discuss dialogue avoid using "-ly" adverbs with your speaker attributions. These adverbs serve to tell the reader how something was said, but your dialogue and descriptions should show, instead. It is also easy for newer writers to use these adverbs in sentences to show action, as in the example below.
Angrily she set her coat on the couch.
This may be okay in a first draft because you convey the action taking place, but when you edit, weed out these adverbs. They tell. They do not show.
Try this instead:
She slung her coat onto the couch.
In the first example, the verb is weak and does little to show action, so the writer added an "-ly" adverb to try to strengthen it. However, it only weakened it even more. When you find yourself in a position where you feel that you need to use an "-ly" adverb, try using a stronger verb instead.
Of course, there are always exceptions. If using an "-ly" adverb is the only way that you can completely describe the action taking place, and you are using a strong verb already, then it is not unacceptable or unprofessional to use an adverb.
Nobody is going to tell you to quit using "-ly" adverbs altogether. What experts will tell you is that amateur writers use them frequently. Weed out as many as you can and replace them with stronger verbs. Keep your writing strong. Make sure it shows the action, and make sure you are not whimping out on showing action by using "shortcuts." The more you write using proper mechanics and advanced stylistic techniques, the less you will be inclined to make amateur mistakes. Before you know it, everything you write will come out sounding better than your best piece does right now.
Style is simply defined as the manner of "voice" that a writer uses to tell the audience what is going on. Style is evident in syntax and diction, as well as figures of speech, such as metaphors. With fiction, the style you use may be influenced by the era in which the story takes place, the setting, or the education or background of your narrator or characters.
In non-fiction and journalism, style may be partially dictated by style guides. Style guides give examples of acceptable uses of words, proper spellings, punctuation, and typography to be used when preparing work for publication. Writers use style guides, as do copy editors and proofreaders to ensure factual accuracy and consistency.
Making sure that your style is consistent throughout a body of work lends to the sophistication of your writing. If you have a character who talks with a southern twang early in the book, make sure it carries throughout the book. On the other hand, if you spell "judgement" (British English) in one place in a body of work, make sure you do not spell it as "judgment" (American English) later on. You can always create a style sheet to make note of things like this, so you do not forget when creating longer pieces or sequels.
A list of style guides is included below for your reference:
AIP Style Manual: For Guidance in Writing, Editing, and Preparing Physics
The AMA Style Guide for Business Writing
The AMS Author Handbook (Mathematics) Manual of Style: A Guide for Authors and Editors ( Medical editing and proofreading) The Associated Press Stylebook and Libel Manual (Journalism, non-fiction, and fiction as well) Geowriting: A Guide to Writing, Editing, and Printing in Earth Science
The Bluebook: A Uniform System of Citation (Law) The Chicago Manual of Style (Non-fiction, fiction) Scientific Style and Format: The CBE Manual for Authors, Editors, and Publishers The ACS Style Guide: A Manual for Authors and Editors A Style Manual for Citing Microform and Nonprint Media
Other Ways to Make Your Writing More Sophisticated
- Avoid using too many exclamation points to show emotion. It makes you seem as though you are insecure with the strength of your dialogue.
- Avoid using italics to put emphasis on words. They are not needed if your dialogue is strong.
- Avoid flowery, poetic figures of speech. Oftentimes, this pulls the reader out of the story. Use clear descriptions that apply to the scene. There is no need to try to impress anyone with your poetic ability unless you are writing poetry.
- Avoid a lot of profanity. Amateur writers use profanity for shock value and sophistication, but using it does not achieve either. If your character swears a lot, just make sure it fits with the scene. Otherwise, one profane word in a book has a lot more effect than a dozen on each page.
Substitutions and Poor Phrasing
There are hundreds of phrases that can enhance your writing, but sometimes writers err on the side of "wordiness." They use phrases they believe sound more formal, more interesting, or more unusual than common alternatives. Unfortunately, if these phrases are using more words than needed to get the point across, they just end up cluttering the sentence. Below are several examples of poor phrasing, along with better alternatives.
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Published on February 4, 2019 by Shona McCombes . Revised on July 23, 2023.
A good introduction paragraph is an essential part of any academic essay . It sets up your argument and tells the reader what to expect.
The main goals of an introduction are to:
- Catch your readerâs attention.
- Give background on your topic.
- Present your thesis statement âthe central point of your essay.
This introduction example is taken from our interactive essay example on the history of Braille.
The invention of Braille was a major turning point in the history of disability. The writing system of raised dots used by visually impaired people was developed by Louis Braille in nineteenth-century France. In a society that did not value disabled people in general, blindness was particularly stigmatized, and lack of access to reading and writing was a significant barrier to social participation. The idea of tactile reading was not entirely new, but existing methods based on sighted systems were difficult to learn and use. As the first writing system designed for blind people’s needs, Braille was a groundbreaking new accessibility tool. It not only provided practical benefits, but also helped change the cultural status of blindness. This essay begins by discussing the situation of blind people in nineteenth-century Europe. It then describes the invention of Braille and the gradual process of its acceptance within blind education. Subsequently, it explores the wide-ranging effects of this invention on blind people’s social and cultural lives.
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Step 1: hook your reader, step 2: give background information, step 3: present your thesis statement, step 4: map your essay’s structure, step 5: check and revise, more examples of essay introductions, other interesting articles, frequently asked questions about the essay introduction.
Your first sentence sets the tone for the whole essay, so spend some time on writing an effective hook.
Avoid long, dense sentencesâstart with something clear, concise and catchy that will spark your reader’s curiosity.
The hook should lead the reader into your essay, giving a sense of the topic you’re writing about and why it’s interesting. Avoid overly broad claims or plain statements of fact.
Examples: Writing a good hook
Take a look at these examples of weak hooks and learn how to improve them.
- Braille was an extremely important invention.
- The invention of Braille was a major turning point in the history of disability.
The first sentence is a dry fact; the second sentence is more interesting, making a bold claim about exactly why the topic is important.
- The internet is defined as “a global computer network providing a variety of information and communication facilities.”
- The spread of the internet has had a world-changing effect, not least on the world of education.
Avoid using a dictionary definition as your hook, especially if it’s an obvious term that everyone knows. The improved example here is still broad, but it gives us a much clearer sense of what the essay will be about.
- Mary Shelley’s Frankenstein is a famous book from the nineteenth century.
- Mary Shelleyâs Frankenstein is often read as a crude cautionary tale about the dangers of scientific advancement.
Instead of just stating a fact that the reader already knows, the improved hook here tells us about the mainstream interpretation of the book, implying that this essay will offer a different interpretation.
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Next, give your reader the context they need to understand your topic and argument. Depending on the subject of your essay, this might include:
- Historical, geographical, or social context
- An outline of the debate you’re addressing
- A summary of relevant theories or research about the topic
- Definitions of key terms
The information here should be broad but clearly focused and relevant to your argument. Donât give too much detailâyou can mention points that you will return to later, but save your evidence and interpretation for the main body of the essay.
How much space you need for background depends on your topic and the scope of your essay. In our Braille example, we take a few sentences to introduce the topic and sketch the social context that the essay will address:
Now it’s time to narrow your focus and show exactly what you want to say about the topic. This is your thesis statement âa sentence or two that sums up your overall argument.
This is the most important part of your introduction. AÂ good thesis isn’t just a statement of fact, but a claim that requires evidence and explanation.
The goal is to clearly convey your own position in a debate or your central point about a topic.
Particularly in longer essays, it’s helpful to end the introduction by signposting what will be covered in each part. Keep it concise and give your reader a clear sense of the direction your argument will take.
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As you research and write, your argument might change focus or direction as you learn more.
For this reason, itâs often a good idea to wait until later in the writing process before you write the introduction paragraphâit can even be the very last thing you write.
When you’ve finished writing the essay body and conclusion , you should return to the introduction and check that it matches the content of the essay.
It’s especially important to make sure your thesis statement accurately represents what you do in the essay. If your argument has gone in a different direction than planned, tweak your thesis statement to match what you actually say.
To polish your writing, you can use something like a paraphrasing tool .
You can use the checklist below to make sure your introduction does everything it’s supposed to.
Checklist: Essay introduction
My first sentence is engaging and relevant.
I have introduced the topic with necessary background information.
I have defined any important terms.
My thesis statement clearly presents my main point or argument.
Everything in the introduction is relevant to the main body of the essay.
You have a strong introduction - now make sure the rest of your essay is just as good.
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This introduction to an argumentative essay sets up the debate about the internet and education, and then clearly states the position the essay will argue for.
The spread of the internet has had a world-changing effect, not least on the world of education. The use of the internet in academic contexts is on the rise, and its role in learning is hotly debated. For many teachers who did not grow up with this technology, its effects seem alarming and potentially harmful. This concern, while understandable, is misguided. The negatives of internet use are outweighed by its critical benefits for students and educatorsâas a uniquely comprehensive and accessible information source; a means of exposure to and engagement with different perspectives; and a highly flexible learning environment.
This introduction to a short expository essay leads into the topic (the invention of the printing press) and states the main point the essay will explain (the effect of this invention on European society).
In many ways, the invention of the printing press marked the end of the Middle Ages. The medieval period in Europe is often remembered as a time of intellectual and political stagnation. Prior to the Renaissance, the average person had very limited access to books and was unlikely to be literate. The invention of the printing press in the 15th century allowed for much less restricted circulation of information in Europe, paving the way for the Reformation.
This introduction to a literary analysis essay , about Mary Shelley’s Frankenstein , starts by describing a simplistic popular view of the story, and then states how the author will give a more complex analysis of the text’s literary devices.
Mary Shelleyâs Frankenstein is often read as a crude cautionary tale. Arguably the first science fiction novel, its plot can be read as a warning about the dangers of scientific advancement unrestrained by ethical considerations. In this reading, and in popular culture representations of the character as a “mad scientist”, Victor Frankenstein represents the callous, arrogant ambition of modern science. However, far from providing a stable image of the character, Shelley uses shifting narrative perspectives to gradually transform our impression of Frankenstein, portraying him in an increasingly negative light as the novel goes on. While he initially appears to be a naive but sympathetic idealist, after the creatureâs narrative Frankenstein begins to resembleâeven in his own tellingâthe thoughtlessly cruel figure the creature represents him as.
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Your essay introduction should include three main things, in this order:
- An opening hook to catch the reader’s attention.
- Relevant background information that the reader needs to know.
- A thesis statement that presents your main point or argument.
The length of each part depends on the length and complexity of your essay .
The “hook” is the first sentence of your essay introduction . It should lead the reader into your essay, giving a sense of why it’s interesting.
To write a good hook, avoid overly broad statements or long, dense sentences. Try to start with something clear, concise and catchy that will spark your reader’s curiosity.
A thesis statement is a sentence that sums up the central point of your paper or essay . Everything else you write should relate to this key idea.
The thesis statement is essential in any academic essay or research paper for two main reasons:
- It gives your writing direction and focus.
- It gives the reader a concise summary of your main point.
Without a clear thesis statement, an essay can end up rambling and unfocused, leaving your reader unsure of exactly what you want to say.
The structure of an essay is divided into an introduction that presents your topic and thesis statement , a body containing your in-depth analysis and arguments, and a conclusion wrapping up your ideas.
The structure of the body is flexible, but you should always spend some time thinking about how you can organize your essay to best serve your ideas.
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15 Words and Phrases That Will Make Your Essay Sound Smarter
As composing any piece of writing, it’s essential to use appropriate vocabulary to make your essay stand out. Plain language sounds boring and unappealing, so it’s really important to know how to write effective papers. Not only do some words can help you persuade the reader, grab their attention, but they can also make you sound smarter.
“It’s always the language, words and phrases that you use in your writing that make your paper sound smart. Your paper can be well-researched and insightful, but it won’t stand out if it’s written in plain, boring language,” says Adam Simon, a college student and contributor to LegitWritingServices essay writing service review and education blog.
So enjoy our list of 15 words and phrases that will be of great help to make you paper sound smarter.
In other words
When to Use: To paraphrase something in a simpler manner, thus making it easier to understand;
Exemplary Sentence: Writing an essay isn’t as black as it’s painted. In other words , once you learn the general tips, all is left is the practice.
That is to say
When to Use: To provide additional explanation to your previous point, or to add information to sound more accurate;
Exemplary Sentence: To start writing an essay one needs to do research. That is to say , one should search for materials, read them, examine and take notes.
To that end
When to Use: A synonymous phrase meaning ‘in order to’ or ‘so’;
Exemplary Sentence: He wanted to get straight A’s. To that end , he has been mastering his writing skills recently.
Supporting points with additional info
And, and, and. Using ‘and’ throughout your essay to add points won’t make your paper sound smarter. There are tons of awesome expressions and here are the top of them.
Furthermore
When to Use: To provide additional points, used at the beginning of a sentence (don’t forget a comma);
Exemplary Sentence: Furthermore , you should proofread and polish your paper before handing out the final variant.
When to Use: To add additional information, or offering some ideas that support your point of view in a similar manner;
Exemplary Sentence: Planning the writing process is vital to avoid writer’s block and craft a well-thought paper. Likewise , it is essential to write an outline, so that your essay is well-structured.
Another key thing to remember
When to Use: If you have already overused the word ‘also’, it’s high time to use its synonymous phrase ‘another key thing to remember’;
Exemplary Sentence: When writing an introduction, make sure you hook the reader’s attention and arouse their interest. Another key thing to remember is that crafting an introduction last thing is often more effective, as you have already had the perfect grasp of the chosen topic.
Not only...but also
When to Use: To present two ideas while the latter is often more surprising than the former one. Keep in mind the inversion moment as well;
Exemplary Sentence: Not only should you support your topic idea with several additional ones, but you should also provide great examples to underpin your point of view.
Coupled with
When to Use: To examine two or more arguments at a time;
Exemplary Sentence: He soon realized that choosing the topic he was passionate about, coupled with following all the academic rules and standards, was the key to getting top grades for the essay.
Expressing contrast
It’s essential to present contrasting opinions in argumentative essays, as well as in any essay if you want to develop your point of view and make it sound strong. That is why, here are some phrases to use.
When to Use: To provide a contrasting point of view;
Exemplary Sentence: Putting off your essay until the last minute isn’t the greatest idea. However , there are some students who claim that they do better when they’re pressed for time.
When to Use: To give a contrasting point; often used at the beginning of a sentence for better emphasis;
Exemplary Sentence: Purchasing essays online is regarded as cheating by the majority of people. Yet some believe there is nothing wrong in asking for a bit of assistance with their papers.
On the other hand
When to Use: Often used along with another contrasting point, for example, there are two different interpretations of the same idea ‘on the one hand’ and ‘on the other hand’;
Exemplary Sentence: Crafting an essay may seem like the worst and the most daunting task. On the other hand , once you’ve finished it, you feel satisfied and have this pleasant sense of accomplishment.
Highlighting important information
Emphasizing particular points in your essay also require some useful vocabulary.
When to Use: A synonymous expression to ‘particularly’ or ‘significantly’ to highlight peculiar information;
Exemplary Sentence: After reading this article, one can notably improve their vocabulary and make their writing sound smarter.
Importantly
When to Use: Another synonym to the word ‘significantly’, suggesting a special meaning to the point;
Exemplary Sentence: Polishing her paper with high-brow vocabulary affected her grades importantly.
Providing examples
You won’t surprise you professor ‘for example’, while the following expression will boost your writing skills.
To give an illustration
When to Use: To provide an example that will best illustrate your point of view
Exemplary Sentence: To give an illustration of what I mean, let’s have a look at the final effective phrase to use.
All things considered
When to Use: In other words, ‘taking everything into account’
Exemplary Sentence: All things considered , writing a good essay may be time- and energy-consuming; it may require scrutinizing tons of academic rules and standards; it can be pressuring and scary. However, following some useful tips can ease the whole composing process. To give an illustration of what I mean, try enriching your vocabulary with these 15 words and phrases and see how smarter your paper sounds now.
Summarizing
If an effective essay was a building, it would have a great foundation (an introduction and a conclusion). An introduction grabs the reader’s attention and guides straight to the main body, while a conclusion has the final say that is supposed to leave an aftertaste. For this reason, it’s essential to use persuasive vocabulary when summarizing your ideas.
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How To Make Your Essay Sound Simple Yet ProfessionalÂ
What is the difference between an essay and a well-written essay?
There is a huge difference, and it is best to understand through grades. Students are already involved with strenuous modules. It can take a toll on them when they are involved in other academic projects.
Are you not making enough impressions with your academic essays?
Trying to figure out why you are not reaching there?
You might be losing on your simplicity and professional intent with your essay. Yes, students face similar problems. Simplistic writing is difficult, and remember, professionalism finds its home in a simple approach. The article discusses the ways to make the essay sound simple yet professional. So, read on to find out.
Simple Yet Profession – What Are The Things To Follow?
Let’s burst the myth here; let’s be honest. Writing a simple, effective yet professional academic essay takes practice. This can not be achieved in a day. It’s akin to a journey. Here, we discuss the points to understand how to reach the destination.
1. Do Not Use Any Contraction
Sometimes students, in their search for a simple tone, take refuge in contraction and finally fall into the trap. But, remember, contractions like won’t, can’t, and haven’t do not go in conformity with the academic style of writing.
So you will have to replace with would not, can not, and have not. This is both simple and professional. Do not repeat this mistake any further. Therefore we advise you to take the help of an essay writing service so that you have a better idea of how assignments are written.
2. Avoid Colloquialism
Remember, informality might relate to simplicity in other genres of writing but not in academic writing precisely. You ought to avoid any colloquialisms in your expression. University writing must have to follow a certain standard.
For example, if you procrastinate with your assignment or do your thing, you can get away with it. This is an informal tone. You need to write like, if you procrastinate with your assignment, do you think you can find an escape route? This is a simple yet professional tone of writing.
3. Bombastic Words – Stay Away!
Bombastic words are assignment killers! Let me tell you this. Teachers typically forbid students to use bombastic words and expressions. This terribly disbalances the sentences and disrupts the line. So you need to stay away from them.
Teachers don’t want your pedantry with vocabulary, useless jargon, and hackneyed phrases – hence they are useless. Consciously keep yourself away from any such practices, and you can really make your academic essay simple yet powerful. Professionalism must follow an order and logical flow. So do not try to disrupt the flow of your writing. Keep sentences short and simple, and this will do it for you.
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4. Back-Up All With Evidence
Back up your writing with evidence. This is the hallmark of academic writing. Quality academic writing is evidence-based. You must have perceived scholastic writing from sources like Google Scholar.
Most of the content is based on facts, and they are well-referenced according to the norms of the university. So you have the Harvard, APA, Vancouver, Chicago, and other conventions of referencing.
Make sure that you are adding references to your writing. Make extensive use of facts and stats as much as possible to make your assignment look professional.
5. Avoid Clutter
Among the major mistakes that take away your marks and impression is clutter. Clutter means unnecessarily stuffing words that are not required to frame an expression.
This is not welcomed in an academic style of writing. Moreover, the repetition of sentences and expressions mar the flow of writing and takes away all sharpness. Therefore it is better that you avoid clutter in your expression.
An unnecessary whirlwind fills the pitcher of word count, and it does not really reflect on the grades. Therefore, it is better that you avoid any clutter with your expressions. Clutter kills simplistic flow and takes your writing far away from professionalism.
6. Avoid Repetition Of The Same Words
You need to avoid any repetition of the same word. This is a childish mistake and is unwelcome at any level. Let us cite an example here:
Brexit created havoc in the UK economy. Brexit not only weakened the UK economy but that of the entire of Europe. Brexit was not the right decision.
Instead of this, you need to write Brexit created havoc in the UK’s economy. It not only weakened the UK’s economy but also the entire of Europe. This makes the sentences logical and keeps the flow.
7. Use Paragraph To Simplify
Divide the chunky parts into paragraphs. Chunk writing decreases the sharpness and readability of the piece of writing. When you are writing a long section, you notice that you quickly lose all interest and enthusiasm. Though you provide lots of statistical data to logically establish your points, it unnecessarily creates a monotony with the writing.
Therefore the best thing is to disintegrate the large sections to bring clarity and simplicity. This goes with professional practice so far as university academic writing conventions are concerned. Smaller paragraphs keep the intent and interest lively.
To Wrap Up!
Writing academic essays is a difficult thing to manage. Moreover, writing a simple and professional essay is more difficult. Mastering a simplistic yet professional essay requires practice. But if one wants to achieve it, one will have to work quite a lot on the writing approach.
Students need to ensure that they use simple expressions instead of twisted ones. They must try their best to put simple words rather than bombastic ones. Try to use as many references as possible to make your writing analytical. Students also need to focus more on the flow of writing.
Always remember the points above when writing an essay. Adhere to these standards to develop your essay so that it turns out to be simple yet professional.
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But one aspect often overlooked is that a good essay should be interesting . It should spark the curiosity of the reader, keep them absorbed, make them want to keep reading and learn more. A boring essay risks losing the readerâs attention; even if the points you make are excellent, a dull writing style or poor handling of a dry subject matter can undermine the positive aspects of the essay. The problem is that many students think that essays should be like this: they think that a dull, dry style is suited to the purposes of academic writing, and donât consider that the teacher reading their essay wants to find the essay interesting. Academic writing doesnât have to be – and shouldnât be – boring. The good news is that there are plenty of things you can do to make your writing more interesting, even though you can only do so much while remaining within the formal confines of academic writing. Letâs look at what they are.
1. Be interested in what youâre writing about
If thereâs one thing guaranteed to inject interest into your writing, itâs actually being interested in what youâre writing about. Passion for a subject comes across naturally in your writing, typically making it more lively and engaging, and infusing an infectious enthusiasm into your words – in the same way that itâs easy to chat knowledgeably to someone about something you find interesting. This makes it relatively easy to write interestingly about a subject you have a real passion for. However, problems arise when youâre forced to write an essay about subjects for which you lack enthusiasm. Itâs difficult to conjure up passion for your least favourite subjects, and that will come across in your writing. There are steps you can take, though: here are some tips on writing about a subject you donât enjoy.
- Adjust your mindset : convince yourself that there are no boring subjects. If the subject or essay comes across as boring, blame yourself; if you find yourself feeling negatively about it, try to find the interest in it. Think about how it relates to the real world and how important the subject is. Find interesting snippets of information about it and look at it from a new angle.
- Think about your reader : consider the fact that not everyone will find the subject as boring as you do. As you write, keep the reader in mind and imagine them to be the worldâs biggest fan of this subject.
- Find the fans : if you find it impossible to get into the mindset of your audience, try Googling the subject to find forums, videos or blog posts in which the subject is discussed by people who do find it interesting. This will help you picture whom youâre writing for, and give you a different perspective on a subject you may not have found inspiring up to now.
2. Include fascinating details
Another factor that can make an essay boring is a dry subject matter. Some subjects or topic areas are naturally dry, and it falls to you to make the essay more interesting through your written style (more on this later) and by trying to find fascinating snippets of information to include that will liven it up a bit and make the information easier to relate to. One way of doing this with a dry subject is to try to make what youâre talking about seem relevant to the real world, as this is easier for the reader to relate to. In a discussion of a seemingly boring piece of legislation, for instance, you could make a comment along the lines of âif it were not for this legislation, none of us would enjoy the freedom to do such and such todayâ, or âLegislation A ultimately paved the way for Legislation B, which transformed criminal law as we know it.â Make it seem exciting!
3. Emulate the style of writers you find interesting
When you read a lot, you subconsciously start emulating the style of the writers you read. Itâs therefore beneficial to read widely, as this exposes you to a range of styles and you can start to take on the characteristics of those you find interesting to read. If you feel engaged with a piece of writing, the writer must be doing something right! As you read, think consciously about what the writer is doing to hold your interest, perhaps underlining or copying out certain phrases, techniques, sentence structures and so on. Then apply their techniques to your own writing.
4. Write in the active voice
Itâs the oldest trick in the book, but using the active rather than the passive voice will automatically make your writing more interesting to read. It results in more direct, energetic writing that makes the reader feel more âin the momentâ. Unfortunately, many students employ the passive voice in the belief that it makes their writing sound more academic or intellectual; in fact, it makes their writing sound boring. Remember, the active voice is when the subject of the sentence âactsâ, while the passive voice is when the subject is acted upon. Passive : It was concluded by the scientists that the methods used were… Active : The scientists concluded that the methods used were⊠The subject in this example is âthe scientistsâ and the âactâ they are carrying out is âconcludingâ. As you can see in this example, the active voice almost always results in neater and more elegant phrasing, which is more concise and enjoyable to read.
5. Borrow some creative writing techniques
Thereâs clearly a limit to the amount of actual âstory-tellingâ you can do when youâre writing an essay; after all, essays should be objective, factual and balanced, which doesnât, at first glance, feel very much like story-telling. However, you can apply some of the principles of story-telling to make your writing more interesting. For example, just as the opening sentence or paragraph of a novel is incredibly important in capturing the attention of the reader early on, so the first paragraph of your essay is essential in making your reader want to continue reading it. Start with an attention-grabbing âhookâ to draw them in, such as a controversial statement, a tantalising snippet of information or a rhetorical question (more on these below). Here are some more techniques you can adopt from creative writing to improve your essays .
6. Think about your own opinion
Your essay is bound to be boring if all you do is paraphrase what everyone else says about something. A good essay – in humanities subjects, at least – incorporates the writerâs intelligent responses to what others say, and this critical consideration not only shows that youâre thinking at a high academic level, but it automatically adds more interest and originality to your writing. So, think independently and donât be afraid to demonstrate that youâre doing as much.
7. Cut the waffle
Rambling on and on is boring, and almost guaranteed to lose the interest of your reader. Youâre at risk of waffling if youâre not completely clear about what you want to say, or if you havenât thought carefully about how youâre going to structure your argument. Doing your research properly and writing an essay plan before you start will help prevent this problem. Editing is an important part of the essay-writing process, so once youâve done a first draft, edit out the waffle. Read through your essay objectively and take out the bits that arenât relevant to the argument or that labour the point. As well as editing out chunks of text, itâs important to be economical with words – not using ten where five will suffice, and avoiding clunky phrases such as those outlined in this article . During the editing process, tighten up your phrasing by eliminating unnecessary words and reordering any sentences that read badly.
8. Using a thesaurus isnât always a good thing
You may think that using a thesaurus to find more complicated words will make your writing more interesting, or sound more academic, but using overly high-brow language can have the wrong effect. It alienates the reader and makes you sound pompous, with the result that the essay is more laborious to read and the reader may quickly lose interest. Despite this, many undergraduates admit to deliberately over-complicating their language to make it sound more high-brow. If you want to keep your reader interested, keep your language clear and simple.
9. Avoid repetitive phrasing
Avoid using the same sentence structure again and again: itâs a recipe for dullness! Instead, use a range of syntax that demonstrates your writing capabilities as well as making your writing more interesting. Mix simple, compound and complex sentences to avoid your writing becoming predictable.
10. Use some figurative language
As weâve already seen, itâs easy to end up rambling when youâre explaining difficult concepts, – particularly when you donât clearly understand it yourself. A way of forcing yourself to think clearly about a concept, as well as explaining it more simply and engagingly, is to make use of figurative language. This means explaining something by comparing it with something else, as in an analogy. For example, you might use the analogy of water escaping from a hole in a bucket to explain the exponential decay of a radioactive substance, as the rate of depletion of both depends on how much remains, making it exponential. This gives the reader something familiar to visualise, making it easier for them to understand a new concept (obviously this will not be a new concept for the teacher who set your essay, but they will want to see that you can explain concepts clearly and that you have a thorough grasp of it yourself).
11. Avoid clichés
ClichĂ©s are overused words or phrases that make your writing predictable, and therefore less interesting. An example would be âat the end of the dayâ, but there are many such favourites of student essay-writers. Donât forget that your teacher will have a stack of essays to read in one sitting; if you use the same tired expressions everyone else uses, your essay will blend in with all the others. Make it stand out by shunning the clichĂ©s you know your classmates will be using.
12. Employ rhetorical questions
One of the ways in which ancient orators held the attention of their audiences and increased the dramatic effect of their speeches was by making use of the rhetorical question. What is a rhetorical question? Itâs essentially one you ask without expecting your audience to answer – one that you will answer yourself, like the one we asked in the previous sentence. This can be an effective way of introducing a new line of enquiry, or of raising questions that youâre going to address in more detail. A good place to use a rhetorical question is at the end of a paragraph, to lead into the next one, or at the beginning of a new paragraph to introduce a new area for exploration. The rhetorical question, âBut is there any evidence to support Xâs claim?â could, for instance, begin a paragraph that discusses evidence for an opinion introduced in the previous paragraph. Whatâs more, as weâve already seen, you could use a rhetorical question as your âhookâ to lure readers in right at the beginning of your essay.
13. Proofread
Finally, you could write the most interesting essay a teacher has ever read, but youâll undermine your good work if itâs littered with errors, which distract the reader from the actual content and will probably annoy them. Before you submit your essay, proofread it thoroughly to ensure that the grammar is elegant, the punctuation is perfect and the spelling is flawless. Donât just use a spelling and grammar checker, as these donât always pick up on all the errors.
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How to make your essays and reports sound more formal
by Manjusha Nambiar · March 31, 2015
Your essays and reports should be written in a formal and academic style.
Here are some smart strategies you can employ to make your writing sound more academic.
Use tentative language
Assertive language sounds less formal and hence it should be avoided. Instead use tentative language. One way of using tentative language is to include expressions like âprobablyâ and âpossiblyâ. You can use them before noun phrases and verbs.
Examples are given below:
Global warming is possibly caused by an increase in the emission of carbon dioxide.
Heredity is probably the most important factor that determines a personâs chances of getting cancer.
The modal verbs may and might also make you sound less assertive.
Parents may be the best teachers for their children.
Avoid the adverbs always and every. Instead use often and much / many.
Many people believe that the internet should be regulated.
Use formal vocabulary. For example, write âobtainâ instead of âgetâ.
Limit the use of phrasal verbs. Write âtolerateâ instead of âput up withâ.
Begin sentences with preparatory it and there.
There are several benefits to living on oneâs own.
It seems that there are several benefits to living on oneâs own.
Limit the use of personal pronouns. For example, you can use âoneâ instead of âyouâ.
One may ask if the internet should be regulated.
Do not use rhetorical questions in your essay.
âUnrestricted access to the internet may affect the normal development of young children. But is regulating it such a good idea after all?â
You may rewrite this passage as follows:
âUnrestricted access to the internet may affect the normal development of young children. However, regulating it does not seem to be such a good idea.â
The connectors
The connector âbesidesâ is informal. Limit its use. The connectors âmoreoverâ and âfurthermoreâ too should be used with care. Both expressions mean that the information that follows them is more important than the information that preceded them.
Instead of âmoreover and âfurthermoreâ, you can use the connectors âin additionâ and âalsoâ . They give equal importance to both sentences.
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How To Write Sounds: Onomatopoeia Definition and Examples
by Joe Bunting | 38 comments
Screech! Hold up. Did you hear that? Boom! No, not that. Ring-ring . Not that either. Moo. There it is.
That is the sound of onomatopoeia, one of the most fun words to spell in the English language, and if you want to know how to write sounds, an absolutely essential literary device.
How does onomatopoeia work? And how can you use it to write sounds? In this article, I'll give you the definition of onomatopoeia, share a list of onomatopoeia examples, and end with a creative writing exercise .
Onomatopoeia Definition
Onomatopoeia. A word that sounds like the sound it describes, e.g. bang, boom, pow.
How to Write Sounds with Onomatopoeia
Adding onomatopoeia to your writing engages the reader's imagination and forces them to mentally say that word, invoking the image or sound effect that you're trying to get across.
When you're writing, you may want the reader to hear the sound of gravel crunching beneath a character's feet.
James walked across the gravel driveway, his boots crunching with each step.
Not the best story I've ever told, but you get the idea, right? Onomatopoeia tries to capture the natural sounds that emerge from character action or setting detail.
It doesn't have to be a poetic sound or a pleasant sound—the goal is to capture image.
To add onomatopoeia to your writing, pay attention to sounds around you. Is a faucet dripping? Or maybe you can hear the woosh of cars as they fly by on the freeway beside your house.
Whatever you hear, try to capture it in a writing sound or a kind of sound effect for your reader.
Use Onomatopoeia to Describe Animal Sounds
Onomatopoeias is often used to describe the sounds animas make, like “oink” or “moo.”
My favorite recent example of onomatopoeia is a humorous song about the sound a fox makes called “What Does a Fox Say” by the Norwegian group Ylvis.
Dog goes “woof” Cat goes “meow” Bird goes “tweet” And mouse goes “squeek” Cow goes “moo” Frog goes “croak” And the elephant goes “toot” Ducks say “quack” And fish go “blub” And the seal goes “ow ow ow” But there's one sound That no one knows What does the fox say?
Different languages have their own onomatopoeias as well. For example, American dogs say “woof woof,” but French dogs say “ouah ouah,” and Japanese dogs say “wan wan.”
Make Up New Words With Onomatopoeia
Going back to our example:
James walked across the gravel driveway, his boots crunching at each step.
You could use the word crunch , which is a great example of onomatopoeia.
But if you wanted to take onomatopoeia a step further you could alter the word, or even make up a new word, to describe the sound. For example, say you have a very specific idea of what that sound is, so instead of saying that the gravel crunched , maybe you make up a word that, when spoken aloud, sounds like the gravel. Crinch or shimpch or even stomp-ch .
Onomatopoeia is, with a few exceptions, the one time when you're writing that no one will correct your spelling!
List of Onomatopoeia Examples
Here's a list of some of the top onomatopoeia examples:
Whichever examples of onomatopoeia strike you as the best description for your action, try a few today and see how they enliven the scene.
What is your favorite onomatopoeia sound word? Are there any onomatopoeia words I forgot? Let me know in the comment s.
Ready to put onomatopoeia to use? Great! Here's your creative writing prompt :
Write for fifteen minutes about a group of friends experiencing the last few days of summer. Incorporate as many onomatopoeias as you can.
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Ok, best conversation ever: we were in Guatemala and my friend asked one of the children what dogs say in Spanish. The little girl, like 6, responded, “Dogs don’t speak Spanish!” (She didn’t say, “Duh!” but that was the tone in her voice).
 Ha ha! We are raising my little girl bilingual (Spanish/English) and all our friends get confused when she point to birds and says “piu piu” instead of “chirp chirp” or “wow wow” instead of “Bow wow”. So yes, dogs speak Spanish.Â
That’s great that you’re raising her bilingual. I hope do the same with my kids someday. Learning a language is hard but doing it when you’re young makes it easier than in the classroom (I’ve done that twice).
How do you write Gasp! (when someone gasps), when you are writing a story and you want to emphasize that word in action?
Finally, someone that gets that if the dogs (or pigs or cats, etc.) of the world got together they would need an international bow-wow translator. đ
âUgh,â she frowned as she threw her head back towards the bright sun beating down on them. âI so donât want to go back to school.â
âWell, as they say, all good things must come to an end.â Her father spoke absently as his hands slipped over the large smooth wheel. He was coming about, steering the boat back towards the harbor entrance.
Ting, ting, ting, ting. The large striped sail was luffing in the wind and the sail ties snapped wildly against the mast.
âHoney, can you tighten the main a little?â
I tucked my tanned outstretched legs underneath me so my mother could grab the line.
Click, click, click, click, click.  My mom screwed up her face as she used all her waning strength to slowly crank the winch for the main sheet. Rrrrrrt!  At last the sail was tight, she could crank no further.
âOk! Thatâs good! Now cleat it off.â
 As the sail stiffened, it became quiet and once again we were left with only the sound of the boat rhythmically surfing through the afternoon swells. Swish, Swish…the sound and the gentle rocking nearly always put me to sleep. Once again, I leaned my head back against the cabin, closed my eyes and let the sun warm my face. Â
I was nearly asleep when I heard the familiar clang of the harbor beacon. I sat up and peered around. It was nearing 5:00 pm and the boats that had gone out that day were on their way back in. As the beacon bobbed to and fro, I caught a whiff of the sea lions perched upon it and lazily atop each other. Like a plate of noodles they nestled into one another until the largest among them suddenly lifted his head and thrust his chest out towards the horizon.  His mates slithered off his back, rudely awakened.Â
Ohr! Ohr! Ohr! One by one, they all clamored their way to an upright position. Soon they were falling over one another trying to catch a scattering of tiny orange treats. Â
I should have known. Â It was my brother, tossing goldfish crackers to the sea lions from the bow of the boat.
Splash! A baby fell into the ocean and soon they were all in the water diving and swimming, poking their heads up looking for treats. Â
That damn kid. He always knew how to ruin a perfectly peaceful moment.
 This has to be some of the best use of onamatopeia I’ve ever read! It all sounds so natural, you can imagine the sounds coming from a boat. I liked your analogy of the sea-lions “like a plate of noodles”, too!
What a well-crafted piece.  If someone had asked he to guess the writing prompt that inspired this story, I never would have onomatopeoia. That’s how seemlessly it is woven into the story. It stands out, yet disappears as just another compelling part of the narrative.
I really enjoyed your submission!
Too tired to read this post tonight, but that is the most beautiful cow I’ve ever seen… Great photo!!!
I know. I was impressed too. đ
Thud.  Sally opened her eyes to the warm darkness of a summer night. She listened intently but all she could hear was Doug’s breathing next to her. She smiled and pulled the light sheet over her. Thud.  Silence.  Scrittch, scratch, scratch,scratch. Thud. Her heart began to race and Doug stirred beside her but the noises in the next room had stopped. Phoooph – an exhalation of breath not quite a snort, and then another flurry of scratching. Thud …. thud it sounded as if something was being thrown around the room.  Doug was sitting up beside her now. She hardly dared to breathe. Squeak, squeak – then silence. Ominous silence. “Bloody cat! Its got a rat.” Doug lay back down pulling her with him. In the morning, just outside their room they found the remains – a long grey tail and a small pile of viscera. The cat was asleep in the sun.
Great build up of tension with your sounds there. Well done, I was expecting it to be much worse than the already bad cat offering. Like.
My favorite sentence: Doug lay back down, pulling her with him. And I love the use of the word scritch. So much more texture than if you had just left it all up to scratching.
The last days of summer in Vladivostok. It had sounded like a great idea. It was still a great idea. Theoretically. In practice, however…
Abigail moaned, almost physically sick, as the slurge of Chantelle’s umpteenth belly-flop lurched across the pool area.
“Telly!” yelped Isabelle, as droplets of water tinkled delicately onto her tanning skin.
There ought to be rules against wearing bikinis, Abigail thought. She glanced sideways at Daffy. Daffy had looked up over her reading glasses, but evidently wasn’t concerned. After all, Daffy could keep her calm through the worst of their sisters’ tricks – the time Telly danged the frying-pan over Isabelle’s pretty head, for insance. A few shrieks couldn’t upset her. She returned to the no-doubt engrossing subject of the Russian Formalists.
Abigail, glancing anxiously at the other occupant of the pool area – a short man, fast asleep, evidently on a mission to tan bulging paunch – decided to try unconcern, too. Lying back on the lounge, she shut her eyes, dreaming of a remote village in Peru. A few whoops from headhunters could hardly be worse than this.
Perhaps it was a premonition. Or maybe the light pop-splash of a beach ball plopping lightly into the pool.
Abigail sat bolt upright – just in time to see the beech ball leave Chantelle’s hand and warrump onto that bright, tempting paunch.
Telly blinked innocently as the man fixed her with bulbous eyes. “How unexpected!” she exclaimed. “Must be a sort o’ magnetic ‘ttraction ‘tween round objects. I’d better go after it, ‘adn’t I?” Telly pulled herself out of the pool and disappeared round a corner, splat-splatting water everywhere.
The lightest whoosh was Isabelle slipping into the pool and underwater before the man could trace any sisterly likenesses.
Daffy’s reading glasses folded with a clickety-click. Snap! Their case shut. A mild thud sufficed to shut the Russian Formalists between their covers. A delicate “Ahem!” as Daffy stood up. “I seem to have forgotten my phone upstairs. I’m expecting an important call…” Clip-clip-clip as she effaced herself, neatly and efficiently, as always.
Abigail lay back, ramming her sunglasses over her eyes and jamming her sunhat on top of her face. If she were only half as adept at making excuses…
A great use of onomatopoeia without making the words stand out like a sore thumb – very natural. Â Nice job!
âAhhhhhh,â Nicki sighed, Tory Burch flip-flops by her side. âYouâre so lucky you guys have a pool.â  Splip. Splip.  âYou really are, Tessa,â agreed Jill. âLook how unswollen my feet look in this water. I wonder if it would work for my ass? Itâs gotten huge!â  âHaha! Mine, too! Tessa, come join us.â  SighâŠ.  âIâll be there in a minute,â said Tessa.  Ka-chick. Ka-chick. Ka-chick. Watermelon rind was still no match for the five-year old knives Tessaâs had gotten for her wedding.   Black teardrops dotted pink flesh of the summer fruit.  âGrrrr.â The seedless sticker had lied to Tessa, again.   Zap-splat, Zap-splat, Zap-splat!  âOw!! Mom, Patrick shot me in the eye!â  âWah-wah-wah, you little cry-baby! Itâs just water, Caroline! Besides, it was an accident.â  Whap. Whap. Crack.  âSo was that.â Caroline smiled, a now-broken plastic pail dangling from her five year-old fingers.  âIâm gonna get you for that!â  âEeeeeek!â Caroline flung the red bucket from her hand, and zoomed away, with her twin brother in hot pursuit.  Bonk. Clatter. Shatter.  Tessa bent down and picked up the pieces of the glass pitcher, sticky with spilled lemonade. Tessa had gotten it for her wedding, too.  âDing Dong the pitcherâs deadâŠâ played in parody in Tessaâs head. She and Bill had registered for different pitcher. But her mother-in-law had given them this one, instead.  The shards clinked like tinkling wind chimes in warm breeze as Tessa dumped them in the garbage.  âStay off the patio!â Tessa called to her children, who seemed to have forgotten they hated each other and were now playing a game theyâd invented called âI can make a grosser sound that you can!â  BlechâŠ.BuurrrpâŠ.Gaaaag⊠ Psssttt-pssst-shhhh-pssst. Even across the yard, Tessa could catch a few of her friendsâ whispered words, including âMy kids will never be like that,â and âI know, doesnât she read Parenting magazine?â  Hmmmph. Next month Nicki and Jill would each give birth to their first child. Until then, they would have all the answers.  âHelp me up,â Jill said to Nicki. âI gotta go pee.â  âGreat. Now you got my bladder thinking it has to go pee, too.â  Ms. September 14 Due Date and Ms. September 22 Due Date groaned as they struggled to launch their beach ball bodies upward.  âThrough the playroom and then first door on your left,” Tessa directed.  It wasnât the closest bathroom, but it was out of earshot of the kitchen.  Pop. Fizz. Blibble blibble blible. Swish.  Tessa toasted the setting summer sun. Etiquette be damned, she downed her champagne in one glorious gulp.  Kindergarten began on Tuesday.  Ahhhhhh.
You’re a master at this!
Fantastic onomatopoeia! Â
       The cool sea breezes softly stroked the cheeks of the three friends as they sat on the small plot of sand that throughout the summer, they had come to consider as their own.
           âIsnât this the best?â Becky said, closing her eyes and letting out a long, contented âahhhh.â The waves wooshed as they climbed the up sand towards our feet, but just as they were about to lap over our toes, fell back with a prolonged shoosh.
           âI donât want to go back to school,â Drew said, gulping the last of his soda, then smacking his lips in a dramatic fashion that made his companions giggle. âI say, we claim this beach in the name of Beach Bums everywhere!â He leapt to his feet, plunking down into the hard-packed sand, hands flying to his hips in a comical fashion.
           Becky and Allison began scooping up the wet, soppy sand and piling it into a rudimentary castle. As they scooped, the sand sucked and bubbled, as if it was angry at being removed from itâs comfortable, squishy bed. They piled their tower so high, that it eventually collapsed like the Tower of Babel. âAw,â they said in unison, sticking out their bottom lips. Allison shrugged, and inspected her nails, flicking the crusty sand from beneath the edges.
           âI never want to leave this spot.â Becky wrapped her arm around her best friend, who in turn wrapped her arm around Drew. The three companions sat staring out into the glassy sea, letting the caw of the gulls lull them into a late summer trance, as the cooper sun dipped sluggishly behind the horizon.
This is wonderful!
Great imagery!
Loved the part about the sand being angry about being being pulled out its comfortable bed (I’d leave out the word squishy though, cause I think being pulled out a comfortable bed is strong on its own and lots of people can relate to it.
Seems like no one wants school to start (except the moms?).
We are here on the White River just as the sun is setting, the three of us, and we are slick with suntan lotion and we are drinking white zin with a splash of Sprite and we feel the way you do when you know an ending is close, though none of you will say it.
We play a game from back in the day, when we stayed out late, hiding behind big trees and small houses, signaling to each other in the black night.
âHoo,â I call from my place on the beach towel, and Royce calls back.
âHoo, hoot,â she says, and takes a swig.
Gaylene takes over then.
âHoo, hoot, hoosier,â she calls, and starts to laugh, the hiccupped laughter sheâs famous for.
A boat whooshes by, a great plume of water in its wake.Â
Royce pulls out the firecrackers sheâs been holding onto since July. She stands, unsteady on her feet, and lays the firecrackers out on the bank of the river. The group of them is as big as a dish towel. Gaylene jumps up and brings her cigarette to Royce, who lights the row of tiny explosives. There are pops like gunfire and the firecrackers flick and snap and hiss and sizzle.
We raise our fists and we thump our foreheads, we dance together, as if the fireworks are the grandest thing weâve seen. Everything tonight is bigger than it should be. The moon seems too close now, so big and so bright the stars fade beside it. I smile to hard, and my back teeth are probably showing. Gaylene is  turning in wide circles calling the Razorbacks. âWoo, pig, sooie,â she calls and wiggles her fingers like sheâs just touched something hot.
Tomorrow sheâll be heading to Fayetteville, where sheâs a freshman at the University of Arkansas.Â
âIâll hate wearing a picture of a hog on everything I own,â Gaylene says. âIf I was little like Royce, I wouldnât care, but one me it looks like a confession.â
And Royce says, âYouâre going to be fine, sweetie. And you havenât been fat since seventh grade.â
In the distance the wind whips across the hills, the sound like wheezing. The highway is a half a mile away, the cars swooshing by, and we stand there, listening.Â
Royce is getting married in a week, something weâre all trying not to talk about, and so we focus on  Gaylene, who stands beneath the glinting moon, and we try to see her future, high and lifted up, and we hang onto it,  we hang onto each other, and we are slashes of light that streak across the black water of the river and spark across the midnight sky.
That’s beautiful!
You have some really great phrases, like the razorback being a confession and and an ending is close though none of us will say it. Also, you developed the friendship very strongly. I wanted to know them better.
Maybe you added some things just for the sake of the onomatopoeia exercise, but I think if you were to develop this into a short story, you could leave out a few scene descriptors (like the boat passing, unless it has relevance to the story, like if it happened after they set off the fireworks and they are afraid they are getting busted?) and you will still have a strong setting.
Beautiful framework. I can definitely see these 3 as chick lit characters. đ
Really beautiful imagery. Â You really have a knack for expressing feelings. Â I loved this scene.
Thank you, thank you, thank you!
I love onomatopoeia! In my piece for the short story contest I wanted to use a word describing a girl calling out. I had in mind a particular sound but wasn’t sure if I could just make it up (now I know!) so I tried to find something like it on dictionary.com. Woohoo, which surprisingly is a word, wasn’t the sound I was after. I ended up using the Australian call cooey, which is also an actual word, even though the story is set in Scotland. I knew words like pop and buzz were onomatopoeia but I didn’t know it was legitimate to make up your own. Even more reason to like onomatopoeia! I also just like saying it! đ
I’ve got problems with onomatopoeia- years ago I wrote a story in college that my professor loved and made me read aloud in class. There was one bit with a clock ticking, and I felt ridiculous reading out the tick tock.  My prof said- rule of thumb: if you feel awkward reading it out loud, don’t write it. So I don’t.
The only way I could do this, was by doing a children themed piece, so here goes:
Splish went the water as they jumped right in,
Into the ocean where they loved to swim.
Whooosh went the sea shell held to their ear
Sounding like the ocean that they loved so dear.
Shoo-oo-oo went the soft summer breeze
That blew the fine grained sand that made them sneeze.
Squish-squash went the wet sand beneath their toes/
“Mommy, where is it that the ocean goes?”
But now that summer has come to an end,
Good by ocean, shell, summer breeze and sand.
âBlaah burla burla burlahâ â cackled the boiling laughter of the bong. Followed by a long sigh-like âPaaaaaaaaahâ and real lifelike cloud burst out of his mouth filling the room above them with thick white smoke. âPheeew, Johny that`s a big one! Where did you get lungs like that!â Said Susan and pulled the bong from his hands. âWell my dear, I`m a trained expert in homemade clouds, mists and any sorts of smoke-like activities.â Johny laughed.
âBlurp blurp blurp.â The bong gargled angrily in her hands. Susan closed her eyes and let out a long âPhoooooâ of smoke towards the ceiling. The pictures on the back of her eyelids begin to move and she could almost swear she heard the whirring âSwish swashâ of the lightsabers she swings in her mind. Â
Lol. This is sooooo funny đ
You could say, footstep. And say the t, and p, heavily.
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Oh, wow. I got to learn a new word! What a cool one! Yes. I must practice this one! Thank you!
How do you all write zip, do you add extra zs or ps when trying to make a sound rather than explain the action of zipping?
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5. Don't use passive voice. Passive voice is wordy, but being formal has nothing to do with wordiness. Don't use thesaurus words you don't fully understand. Big words don't make your writing sound more formal, and this can backfire when you pick a word that doesn't mean what you think it means.
Prioritize using the first-person singular. Unlike in some other kinds of academic writing, you should write in the first-person singular (e.g., "I," "me") in a college application essay to highlight your perspective. Avoid using "one" for generalizations, since this sounds stilted and unnatural. Use "we" sparingly to avoid ...
good insane, crazy ridiculous, horrible, terrible Words that express value judgments are typically avoided when writing academic papers (and when using APA style in general). Using too many of these words can create a tone that sounds emotional or opinionated. You may want to replace these types of words with words that are more specific.
Body #2: Students should instead focus on internal fulfillment when writing an essay. Body #3: Not only will focusing on internal fulfillment allow students to have more fun, it will also result in better essays. Conclusion: Writing an essay doesn't have to be simply a way to earn a good grade.
For instance, let's say you're writing an essay. There are three components you will be working with throughout your piece: the title, the paragraphs, and the sentences.
The basic structure of an essay always consists of an introduction, a body, and a conclusion. But for many students, the most difficult part of structuring an essay is deciding how to organize information within the body. This article provides useful templates and tips to help you outline your essay, make decisions about your structure, and ...
Sample College Essay 2 with Feedback. This content is licensed by Khan Academy and is available for free at www.khanacademy.org. College essays are an important part of your college application and give you the chance to show colleges and universities your personality. This guide will give you tips on how to write an effective college essay.
Nine Basic Ways to Improve Your Style in Academic Writing. 1. Use ACTIVE VOICE. Don't say: "The stepmother's house was cleaned by Cinderella." (Passive.) Say instead: "Cinderella cleaned the stepmother's house." (Active voice.) Passive voice construction ("was cleaned") is reserved for those occasions where the "do-er" of the action is unknown.
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Published October 19, 2021. Our top tips on how to write an academic essay. Study and remember these essay writing skills to make your essay more academic.
They are not needed if your dialogue is strong. Avoid flowery, poetic figures of speech. Oftentimes, this pulls the reader out of the story. Use clear descriptions that apply to the scene. There is no need to try to impress anyone with your poetic ability unless you are writing poetry. Avoid a lot of profanity.
Step 1: Hook your reader. Step 2: Give background information. Step 3: Present your thesis statement. Step 4: Map your essay's structure. Step 5: Check and revise. More examples of essay introductions. Other interesting articles. Frequently asked questions about the essay introduction.
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Consciously keep yourself away from any such practices, and you can really make your academic essay simple yet powerful. Professionalism must follow an order and logical flow. So do not try to disrupt the flow of your writing. Keep sentences short and simple, and this will do it for you. Image from Adobe Stock. 4.
4. Write in the active voice. If the scientists are doing something active - concluding, analysing, researching - you should avoid the passive voice. It's the oldest trick in the book, but using the active rather than the passive voice will automatically make your writing more interesting to read.
Use formal vocabulary. For example, write 'obtain' instead of 'get'. Limit the use of phrasal verbs. Write 'tolerate' instead of 'put up with'. Begin sentences with preparatory it and there. There are several benefits to living on one's own. It seems that there are several benefits to living on one's own. Limit the use of ...
My favorite recent example of onomatopoeia is a humorous song about the sound a fox makes called "What Does a Fox Say" by the Norwegian group Ylvis. Dog goes "woof". Cat goes "meow". Bird goes "tweet". And mouse goes "squeek". Cow goes "moo". Frog goes "croak". And the elephant goes "toot". Ducks say "quack".
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